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Bev S.

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on: May 12, 2014, 12:41:44 PM
My very first portrait ever. . . . .after finishing the How to Draw Portraits classes with Nolan,  here is my WIP of Dylan!
I feel pretty good about this, although there is something not quite right and I'd sure appreciate any comments and criticisms. I think he looks a bit cross eyed in my drawing and I don't know why. . . .  :confused:
Dylan's photograph. . .and my ref. photo. . . .
Come on everybody, tell me what you think. . . . I really want to do a good job on my very first "solo" portrait!! ;D
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Reply #1 on: May 12, 2014, 02:29:00 PM
 :clap: :clap: :clap:  Bev, you are doing a great job for sure.  However, what struck me is that Dylan's left eye, as you look at the photograph, is smaller than his right and in your drawing, you have them both the same size and the iris I feel could be lightened a tad as it looks as though his eyes are blue but appear brown in your drawing which could also be the fault of the camera.  However, could that perhaps be the reason why you think you have him cross eyed?  I am not sure but just give it time and more experienced artists will come to your aid.    Patricia
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Reply #2 on: May 12, 2014, 06:04:40 PM
Bev you are doing very well.  I thought the same as Patricia, the pupile is a bit  to big on the eye of the right side of the page and  maybe the hightlight is to similar in the eyes.    :yippee: :clap: :clap: :clap: you  are on the right track.
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Reply #3 on: May 12, 2014, 07:24:50 PM
it's shaping up beautifully, Bev.  What  a good-looking little fellow.

I think what makes you think his eye is crossed is that there is just a tiny bit more white showing on your drawn eye that there really is in the photo of Dylan's left eye.

Otherwise, it's great so far.

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Reply #4 on: May 12, 2014, 09:21:32 PM
Bev,  what a handsome little fellow.   You have made a great start.  The outline is fine.  It's the smallest details I find that can change the look.  I think both eyes are a little too large the left one appears to be slightly smaller  (if you have a pair of dividers check the measurements. It might help because it's just a small change from what you have drawn.  I think the pupils are a little to big.  And the left one as I'm looking at it, is off center.   I think the iris color is okay.  You may want to put some more value in the whites if you are going to put the reflections were you have them.  Also don't forget to darken  the outside of the eyeball and near the tear duct, so that you are showing the rounding of the eyeball.  Also check the outside of the eyes they appear to finish differently.  The original shows them finishing on the same line.  (Hope I'm making some sense.) The bottom lip is a little wider on the right.  Check the original, as I see it, the thickest part is more to the center.   I sure hope I have been helpful.  Because this is going to be one awesome portrait when it's finished.
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Reply #5 on: May 13, 2014, 12:37:12 AM
Lovely start Bev!  What Patricia said, although I favor having the eyes a bit too large rather than the too small, where you went afoul is probably in blocking the fold for the lid.  So, if you leave the bottom of the lid as the top line and draw a bottom line a little less than the distance you have now and it should be right... does that make sense? :confused:
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Reply #6 on: May 13, 2014, 02:22:36 AM
 :thankyou: :thankyou: :thankyou: . . . I thank each of you, Patricia, Danielle, Mea, Jill and Steven for taking the time to look and to comment on Dylan's portrait. It's so hard to see our own mistakes but they become so clear when someone else points to them. . . . .thanks guys!!!!!
Dylan is indeed a darling, blue-eyed blond about 6 years old, and the son of our neighbours across the street. I don't know them very well at all but my hubby is quite friendly with them and he was the photographer. . . . enough said about that!!!
I have struggled with Dylan's obviously different sized eyes and even asked Nolan what to do about it. His advice was to basically take my artists licence and even them out. I think I have to do some more work on the evening out part. . . . LOL!
Yes, Jill the I see the left pupil is off centre, thanks!! No wonder the poor kid looks cross-eyed!! I also need to do more contouring and some shading of the eyeballs and I will check the outside finishing line, thanks again.
As Nolan said in class, the eyes have to be right. . . . . . so I will be working on them for a while yet!!
Steven, I'm not quite sure I get what you are saying. . . . I am rather dense some times!! ;D
Thanks again everyone, you have all been an immense help. . . . .skipping off to the drawing board :2funny:
 
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Reply #7 on: May 13, 2014, 05:13:24 AM
Great start Bev!
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Reply #8 on: May 13, 2014, 06:09:52 AM
 Thank you JayJ. . . . Everybody gave me such good advice that when I got back to Dylan, I decided there was just too much wrong with him so. . . . . . .my first attempt has been consigned to the fireplace and I'm starting again from the beginning!!  :(  It's better this way, at least the finished portrait won't be so overworked and messy looking. . . . .I hope!!!LOL!
Stay tuned for the next instalment of the exciting saga of the "Portrait of Dylan". . . . . . . . . . :2funny:
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Reply #9 on: May 13, 2014, 08:33:38 AM
Oh no Bev! :( Now u know why I dont do portraits....just dont have patience like u all...one little dot makes such a  huge difference...it makes me :pullhair:


Good luck with the next  one! :)
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Reply #10 on: May 13, 2014, 09:30:11 AM
Really good start Bev, I think the eye on the right as you look at the picture arches too far to the right, if you curve it so the  upper eyelid is at it's highest over the center of the pupil and then curves down I think it will work itself out. Try it with a piece of tracing paper first to see if it doesn't look better before you go erasing anything.
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Reply #11 on: May 13, 2014, 12:53:45 PM
there was no need to trash this drawing, it was coming along just fine :'(


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Reply #12 on: May 15, 2014, 02:36:18 AM
there was no need to trash this drawing, it was coming along just fine :'(
:'( :(   Thank you Nolan . . . . . but it was good practice for the main event!
 :thankyou:  Brian. . . Nolan showed us the trick with the tracing paper and it really saves the day in many places, but with Dylan #1, I had his eyes on the wrong slant or angle from the get go, so I would have had to erase them and felt it would make the work too muddied & overworked if I did that.  Hang on  for Dylan #2!!
 :thankyou:  JayJ . . . . sometimes I feel like just weeping when I cant get my pencil to do what my mind wants it to do. . . . . . . but we keep on keeping on!!!
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Reply #13 on: May 15, 2014, 04:41:10 AM
 :'( It's a shame you didn't just hang on to #1 Bev. I have found that it makes a great learning tool after the next one is complete. It shows me where I went wrong and I find I'm less likely to repeat the dastardly deed!  :o

But, since you committed it to the inferno  :furious: no point!  ::)

Best of luck, judging by the 1st go, this is going to be a cracker!  :yippee:
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Reply #14 on: May 15, 2014, 05:08:42 AM
 :'( Sorry to hear that you will trash your first drawing, there was not enough correction to do that.  But do not give up , you are doing so great. :smitten:
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