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Alice L Lemke

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on: December 11, 2013, 08:51:08 PM
OK, I really need your opinions...should I stop fiddling with this and call it done, or does it look unfinished?  I've been staring at this so long I can't tell.


Thanks!

Alice

Here is the final version, ready or not, I have to wrap it up.  Thanks for all your help, everyone!

« Last Edit: December 22, 2013, 03:19:26 PM by Alice L Lemke »
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Reply #1 on: December 11, 2013, 09:21:45 PM
Dear Alice;

I love the color and contrasts in your painting  but, the blob of land /water in the middle seems out of place to me or maybe it's just to plain/without life.     :confused:   The bits of land/water  jutting out don't lay horizontal with the water. I may be wrong is this patch land or water?   Also, that lonely dark evergreen on the left seem to have little or no color.  I am a beginner so these are just a few things I observed.     Just a thoughts.

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Alice L Lemke

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Reply #2 on: December 11, 2013, 09:33:26 PM
The land is very fine granite sand, and even though that's how it really looks (because it's usually at the bottom of the lake) it does look bare.
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Reply #3 on: December 12, 2013, 07:32:32 AM
 :yippee:What a great painting. Ilove it just as it is. Congratulations! :congrats:
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Reply #4 on: December 12, 2013, 07:40:09 AM
Alice,  I love this picture and the colors.  The reflections are great.  However, I agree with May Lynn there is something amiss with the piece of land.   I think it is a problem  from the "V" and above.  I just can't put my finger on it.  Not much help from me I'm afraid. 
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Reply #5 on: December 12, 2013, 10:04:00 AM
Hi, Alice

What gorgeous colors, trees, rocks, and reflections. Magnificent!

The sand/land mass, though, does seem problematic. It looks a little like an iceberg floating on the water. I wonder if that might be helped by flattening out the curve at the top of the mass and also by reducing the curvature of the lower "V".

I think if I were to paint this I would take some artist's license with the photo and great greatly reduce the size of that land mass, so that it would be little more than a nondescript "L" shape in the lower lefthand corner. As it is, it competes too much with your gorgeous trees and reflections which, to me, are the focal point.
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Alice L Lemke

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Reply #6 on: December 12, 2013, 11:12:22 AM
I agree with you, the sand does look bland.  I don't know what you mean by "V" but I think I can make it look more flat if the brush strokes were more horizontal to the picture plane.  I'm going to add more texture so it doesn't look like snow, maybe some interesting shadows.  I want to keep the interesting zig-zag that brings the eye into the picture to the focal point and connects the passage of light shapes.  I will keep working on it.

For decades Mirror Lake was dredged and kept from filling up with sand, but that was stopped in the '70s by the environmentalists.  The sand was used for the roads in the winter, but then they were forced to use chemicals and salt to keep them clear.  The whole valley is sand, so it was really more natural and less destructive.
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Reply #7 on: December 12, 2013, 02:22:05 PM
An amazing painting, as usual for you Alice.  :clap:

I, too, was confused by the sand and assumed it was snow, but wondered why it was only in one place. The contrast is so dramatic that one is drawn to the snow conclusion.

I think you are on the right track adding some texture. Would it be possible to mask and do a very fine splatter of slightly darker gray to define it as sand? Maybe even a few tiny bits of gravels here and there. And a bit darker fading to light to give more of a sense of distance.

I love this painting!!!
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Reply #8 on: December 12, 2013, 03:31:02 PM
Alice, good job! This painting is an example of where Dennis says "It's not what you put in a painting but what you leave out, that makes a painting."   What you see and what you want seen are not always compatible. The Merced  looks just as painted, in real life.
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Reply #9 on: December 12, 2013, 05:59:03 PM
I think the sand area would work as is if you didn't have it directly below your deepest shadow on the mountain and the tree in deep shadow on the left.  My eye keeps bouncing back and forth between the two extremes, distracting me from the rest of the picture.

All the elements are well done, just doesn't tie together somehow...  :confused:
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Reply #10 on: December 12, 2013, 07:08:49 PM
Alice I must say I love the fall colors. Your trees and the reflection are nicely done. I do agree about that evergreen tree on the left. I know you will figure it out about the sand.

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Alice L Lemke

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Reply #11 on: December 13, 2013, 12:48:07 PM
The dark tree on the left is now gone and I will push back the sand next.  The sand is the part that is not done, that's why it's so light and left for last.

The middle trees were masked, the ones on the right were scratched in with a razor.  Next time, I will do all those that way, but I was following instructions for the masked ones.

Thanks, Nina, Steve, Bryce, Sue, Jill & May.  Your comments are appreciated.
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Alice L Lemke

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Reply #12 on: December 17, 2013, 05:02:35 PM
Thanks for everyone's suggestions.  This has gone from a quick lesson into a major project that will be a Christmas present for my mom, who was born and raised in Yosemite, if I can get my husband to let it go.


It's still not done. I messed up the edge of the stream/lake and I'm still working on the trees.
« Last Edit: December 17, 2013, 06:23:58 PM by Alice L Lemke »
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Reply #13 on: December 17, 2013, 05:40:30 PM
Lovely lakescape, Alice.   Your trees like beautiful.

Your mom's going to love it.

aloha

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Reply #14 on: December 17, 2013, 05:58:19 PM
Just seen this for the first time. There were some very good suggestions.
See how the darkened bottom left corner has guided the eye back the where the eye should be - the focal point :clap: :clap: :clap:
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