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Alan Dixon

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on: June 27, 2012, 11:18:10 AM
I am a bit confused on this painting. I kind of like it, but something is not right. I look forward to your helpful suggestions
Alan


Kelley

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Reply #1 on: June 27, 2012, 11:54:31 AM
The lightning is striking close (mid-foreground), but appears far away at the same time.  This also gives the impression that the cloud is up close instead of afar.  Have the center lightning strike at or near the horizon instead of this side of the water.  Also add the source of the reflected light.  Hope this helps.

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Alan Dixon

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Reply #2 on: June 27, 2012, 12:55:36 PM
Thanks Kelly. Actually the red is not water but sky below the cloud layer. This might in fact be the problem with this painting. Perhaps if I changed the red sky to water and moved the sun up or out, it just might make a painting out of it. Other thoughts?
Alan


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Reply #3 on: June 27, 2012, 05:42:18 PM
Ah, my apologies.  Perhaps try painting a gradual transition that shows sky at dusk.  For example, red to orange to pink or violet.  I'll let other folks here respond.  Do you happen to have a reference photo handy?
Kelley


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Reply #4 on: June 28, 2012, 11:39:10 AM
and there you have pin pointed the problem Alan - the band of cloud is splitting the painting in two making the viewer think that the red underneath is water with a sun / moon reflecting in it. So the viewer is now confused at seeing a reflection of the sun / moon, but no sun / moon in the  sky.

You will need to modify your clouds to make it more obvious. I would also add a bit of a shading to the sky colour as well O0


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Reply #5 on: June 30, 2012, 05:14:32 PM
I am a bit reluctant to load this change because the colours in the photo are not as good as the actual painting. I have tried to modify the colours using Photopaint X3, but I just can't get the colours right (especially the sky of which the colours are much warmer. Following the previous advice I have removed the red sky and replaced it with a river and far shore. I am not completely happy with the river colour and I look forward to your comments. I am assuming the river would be totally in the shade so I used a very dark blue.
Alan


 

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