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Bill76434

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on: November 28, 2017, 12:55:42 PM
I would like an in depth critique on the picture. One thing I am not happy with is the way the trail ends at the left. Painted from a photo I took in 2015. 


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Reply #1 on: November 28, 2017, 01:52:14 PM
 :clap: :clap: :clap:  Bill, I think your work is excellent but I am not one to critique anybody's work. However,  am sure that one of our more experienced members will be around to help you out with suggestions/advice shortly.


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Reply #2 on: November 28, 2017, 03:49:22 PM
Nicely painted!
The trail needs to fade as it recedes into the background. Right now it is all the same color so it looks more like a wall than a trail. Wash it out further away, darker colors as it gets closer and the far side of the trail slightly lighter than the near side will make it sit down.
Similarly the cliff in the center of the painting should be a little lighter than the cliff to the right. Colors fade to gray as they get further from the viewer which gives more depth to the work.
I think the horse looks a little un-natural, putting one or two legs forward perhaps the front far leg bent a little?
These are really minor things which will help make the painting pop.
You have a nice eye for color, I like it.
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Reply #3 on: November 28, 2017, 06:58:04 PM
Bill,

I like the colors - I'm partial to brown!  Love the wide-open sky.

The horse looks like it only has two legs, so I understand what Brian mea  Is the horse standing on a butte?

Nice depth to the background.

As Brian says, a few tweaks and you'll have a really good painting there.

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Bill76434

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Reply #4 on: November 28, 2017, 09:40:38 PM
Thanks for the response Patricia Brian and Mea,    Great critique Brian this exactly what I am after, I shall see if I can put your advise to the paper without destroying it. In any case I think I will still do another.
Cheers
Bill


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Reply #5 on: November 29, 2017, 06:09:57 AM
Glad to help Bill, try dry brushing some color on the path it's much easier to control. Then trace the outline of the horse and use the tracing to get the stance right before changing the painting. A very light wash of grey over the cliff could fix that.
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Bill76434

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Reply #6 on: November 29, 2017, 05:28:20 PM
Ok, here is the rework, again Brian thanks for your help. It's better but still not as I'd like, I just added a little more to the horse legs. 
A little more experience under the belt.I will definitely do the full painting again.


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Reply #7 on: November 29, 2017, 09:54:16 PM
 :clap: :clap: :clap: What worries me is the fact that the top of the ledge lines up exactly with the slope of the distant hill - this tends to connect them together and destroys the perspective of distance. Lower the line to meet  somewhat lower than the top point - it must disappear into the side of the cliff. O0
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Reply #8 on: November 30, 2017, 12:46:58 AM
Thanks Dennis, I will follow your advise on the next one. I have definitely come to the right place to learn. Other websites I have been on the people tend to avoid constructive criticism.


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Reply #9 on: November 30, 2017, 05:04:28 AM
Bill, I think that there are so many good things about this painting--the textures, the aerial perspective, the subtlety of the sky.  I agree with Brian on the horse.  Proportion seems a bit off, check that and it bothers me that his tail is up and hooked.  I know horses do that, but the dark of that tail against the background makes your eye go to that small spot quickly.  Not sure it should be the focal point rather than the horse and rider.  Lovely western scene!!!


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Reply #10 on: November 30, 2017, 06:16:59 AM
 :think:   I see I'm late to the party! I think the others have pretty much covered the tweaks. I agree especially with Lynn about the tail. Great scene.  O0
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Reply #11 on: November 30, 2017, 02:36:20 PM
Thanks Lynn and Val, I shall be keeping all these comments in mind on my next effort. Regarding posture of the horse I literally copied the composition from my photograph, forgot about the "Artistic License".  :)


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Reply #12 on: December 10, 2017, 11:33:48 AM
Bill:  I agree with the other comments. If you can fix the cliff and soften the bottom of the distant hill you will have a nice painting.   :clap: :clap:
Kathy


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Reply #13 on: December 11, 2017, 01:27:41 PM
Thanks Kathy, I will redo this sometime but there are so many other scenes and subjects I want to paint.


 

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