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Sherri

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I was commissioned to do this drawing of a grandmother with her baby. I watched and did the little boy portrait class that Nolan taught. Please give me any suggestions for improvement.

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Reply #1 on: October 10, 2017, 04:27:31 PM
Sherry, you have done a good job, my only concern is that the you have continued the shine on her forehead right down her nose without a break at the bridge of the nose and her thumb on her right hand near the baby's feet is a little too long but otherwise I think you have done a great job.  Hope this helps.


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Reply #2 on: October 10, 2017, 07:10:53 PM
Patricia. Thanks for looking at it and helping me. You r so right. I’ll tint a little. Sherri
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Reply #3 on: October 10, 2017, 07:42:22 PM
Does this look better. Patricia. You were right on about the highlights. See anything else?  Not sure how I got it turned sideways.  :D

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Reply #4 on: October 11, 2017, 04:56:39 PM
 :clap: :clap: :clap:  Sherri,  your drawing is coming along nicely. I would just tint the shine down her nose a tad and darken the area around the side of her nostrils slightly to give it some shape. However, wait for the more experienced artists to give their take on it.  I too, don't know how to turn your drawing upright but someone will come to your aid.


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Reply #5 on: October 12, 2017, 05:22:43 AM
You have made a lovely rendition, Sherry.  O0. I have some suggestions:
1. at present the upperlip of the grandma cannot be differentiated from the von lower lip. Maybe you could define that a bit more.
2. The cane chair could be defined a bit more too, to differentiate from the black T-shirt
3. The black T-shirt could be further darkened.

Hope this is helpful.
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Sherri

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Reply #6 on: October 13, 2017, 03:14:08 PM
Thanks Gita and Patricia. I really appreciate the help. Sherri
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Reply #7 on: October 13, 2017, 04:16:31 PM
Sherri you have started well on this portrait  :clap:, with the changes already suggested I think you will be well on the way to it looking good.  I have a few humble suggestions for you to perhaps look at.

1) you have not sketched in the babys hair which is almost the colour of the Grannys blouse, maybe a tone darker ( if you lighten the image you will see it more clearly defined) the shadow on top of his head could perhaps be a little lighter
2) lighten the tone around babys nose and eyes they appear to be to "defined " like youve drawn them in and not shaded them instead..not sure that makes sense  ;)
3) grannies fingers are definitely way too long, making them seem out of proportion. and on our right side of her face you have shaded her hair a bit darker so it seems to be part of her face instead of her hair which seems to make her face a bit out of shape.
I think you just need to check your tonal values a bit, the photograph is not an easy one to follow which makes it more difficult. :)

Happy sketching   :painting:
 

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Sherri

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Reply #8 on: October 13, 2017, 10:38:51 PM
Thanks win. I will make the changes. I hate the reference picture because it is not a clear picture. Sherri
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Reply #9 on: October 18, 2017, 06:24:05 PM
I love it when people rise to the challenge of doing commissions. Well done Sherri.  :painting:


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Reply #10 on: October 19, 2017, 04:12:08 AM
Me too Linley and I really admire everyone for taking on the challenge of a commission.   I have never sold a painting and if I ever got a commission I would probably mess my pants.     Patricia   :2funny:
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Reply #11 on: October 19, 2017, 10:22:50 AM
Thanks so much. This one was a big leap for me but I am learning so much. Sherri
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